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    Elite posted on Jun 16, 2008 3:54:31 PM - Report post
     
    Seeing how no one will post in my blog heres why I did.

    An endless void of despair
    I thought I would forever drift endlessly
    Then I gazed into your eyes
    I knew then where my destiny lies
    For your beauty shall hold me till the end of time
    Entranced by you I felt the world melt away and then we were all but one
    Then as I dared to close my eyes
    I saw that you were gone
    Then the shadows swept upon me
    The world was so dark with out your light
    Were you but a dream....?
    I cant find you try all I might
    Il never give in
    there will be no end to my fight

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    GORDONFREMAN posted on Jun 16, 2008 3:56:18 PM - Report post
     
    quote:
    originally posted by Dancer087

    quote:
    originally posted by GORDONFREMAN

    ساقیا بده جامی زان شراب روحانی
    تا دمی براساییم زین حجاب ظلمانی
    طره ی پریشانش دیدم به دل گفتم
    این همه پریشانی بز سر پریشانی
    بی وفا نگار من میکند به کار من
    خنده های زیر لب عشوه های پنهانی
    دین ودل به یک دیدن باختیم خرسندیم
    در قمار عشق ای دل کی بود پشیمانی؟
    خانه ی دل ما را از کرم غمارت کن
    پیش از این که این خانه رو نهد به ویرانی
    ما سیه گلیمان را جز بلا نمیشاید
    بر دل بهایی نه.هر بلا که بتوانی



    it is a very cute persian poem said by sheikhe bahayee.

    oh, i dont want to be 'that guy'

    but for future reference would you mind posting in English only,
    seeing as this is an English website.

    merci

    hey i want to defend from persian.

     
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    Serivor posted on Jun 16, 2008 3:56:24 PM - Report post
     
    quote:
    originally posted by Elite

    Seeing how no one will post in my blog heres why I did.

    An endless void of despair
    I thought I would forever drift endlessly
    Then I gazed into your eyes
    I knew then where my destiny lies
    For your beauty shall hold me till the end of time
    Entranced by you I felt the world melt away and then we were all but one
    Then as I dared to close my eyes
    I saw that you were gone
    Then the shadows swept upon me
    The world was so dark with out your light
    Were you but a dream....?
    I cant find you try all I might
    Il never give in
    there will be no end to my fight

    This is a good write minus some grammatical errors.

     
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    Elite posted on Jun 16, 2008 4:02:46 PM - Report post
     
    Erm could you point these errors out cause neither my eyes or my spell checker could find error unless me and my spell checker are both going insane.
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    Spartan-112 posted on Jun 16, 2008 4:17:31 PM - Report post
     
    I don't really like poetry but I would love to hear what you have.
     
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    Serivor posted on Jun 16, 2008 4:21:31 PM - Report post
     
    An endless void of despair
    I thought I would forever drift endlessly
    Then I gazed into your eyes
    I knew then where my destiny lies
    For your beauty shall hold me till the end of time
    Entranced by you I felt the world melt away and then we were all but one
    Then as I dared to close my eyes
    I saw that you were gone
    Then the shadows swept upon me
    The world was so dark with out your light *without is one word
    Were you but a dream....?
    --->I cant find you try all I might<----- * this whole sentence
    Il never give in * you forgot the i
    there will be no end to my fight
     
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    Spartan-112 posted on Jun 16, 2008 4:26:19 PM - Report post
     
    Do you write poetry alot? You have some really good poems!
     
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    Elite posted on Jun 16, 2008 4:30:14 PM - Report post
     
    That one was mine
    Oh yeah and I just got grammar nazified
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