Poetry. on General Discussions Message Board - Page 35

Serivor · 4/4/2008

hey, this is something i've kinda always wondered. who here in CHU likes poetry, whether it be just

INACTIVE

Greendaysuks136 posted on Jun 16, 2008 4:30:20 PM - Report post

quote:

originally posted by Serivor

An endless void of despair
I thought I would forever drift endlessly
Then I gazed into your eyes
I knew then where my destiny lies
For your beauty shall hold me till the end of time
Entranced by you I felt the world melt away and then we were all but one
Then as I dared to close my eyes
I saw that you were gone
Then the shadows swept upon me
The world was so dark with out your light *without is one word
Were you but a dream....?
--->I cant find you try all I might<----- * this whole sentence
Il never give in * you forgot the i
there will be no end to my fight

Grammar nazi.

INACTIVE

Serivor posted on Jun 16, 2008 4:36:06 PM - Report post

quote:

originally posted by Elite

That one was mine
Oh yeah and I just got grammar nazified

You wanted me to show you and I did.
Haha, and I really am German...=P

INACTIVE

Greendaysuks136 posted on Jun 16, 2008 5:52:32 PM - Report post

I see my world ripped apart
by fire, force, and lightning.
All I know turns on me,
no more caring, only fighting.
I burn as the fires of hatred consume me,
dragging me into the depths of Hell.
All my pleas and cries for help,
don't they ring a bell?
The only thing that brings me joy
is the lightning crashing down.
The electric tears of the sky,
lashing at the ground.
Soon my world will be gone,
and I won't shed a tear.
The casket lid closes on me,
while my soul is gripped with fear.

INACTIVE

Serivor posted on Jun 16, 2008 5:55:46 PM - Report post

I like it

ELITE

Fennel posted on Jun 16, 2008 6:43:20 PM - Report post

Well here is something to top GDS136

FINAL ESCAPE

We are reborn
Staring into eyes
No escaping the truth
Watching, waiting
Things are right
Escaping the cell
On the run
Flee for life
Flee for fear of death
Souls gone on, forever lost
Face the fear, for never pain
Flee from the pain
Many alike at heart
Judging goes on
Release the pain and heal
The fallen are reborn
The pain everyone fills
Pain never fades
Gasping for life
Falling from everything
As we hurt, we’re held
Hell is what must fight
Changing ways, new path is laid
Forward to the light
Our souls live forever
Still fight for life
Pain and misery we’ve seen
See the path to relief
Run away from the past
Eternal pain
Never escapes
Keep running
This is final
Final release
Final escape

INACTIVE

Serivor posted on Jun 16, 2008 9:10:41 PM - Report post

To the Girl Who Brought Me Her Love

I never thought I'd feel this way about anyone,
But you brought me these feelings of joy.
You changed me from nothing, and made me into something.
You gave meaning to this script called Life

I thought happiness was all gone for me,
But you showed me everything I never knew.
You took away the pain, and the hurt I felt,
And turned it into fluttering butterflies.

My view on life has totally taken a new course.
Now it's headed in the direction of you.
And feelings have arose, feelings I've never felt.
...the feelings of me wanting to spend the rest of my life with you...and only you.

INACTIVE

Serivor posted on Jun 16, 2008 10:29:28 PM - Report post

quote:

originally posted by Fennel

Well here is something to top GDS136

FINAL ESCAPE

We are reborn
Staring into eyes
No escaping the truth
Watching, waiting
Things are right
Escaping the cell
On the run
Flee for life
Flee for fear of death
Souls gone on, forever lost
Face the fear, for never pain
Flee from the pain
Many alike at heart
Judging goes on
Release the pain and heal
The fallen are reborn
The pain everyone fills
Pain never fades
Gasping for life
Falling from everything
As we hurt, we’re held
Hell is what must fight
Changing ways, new path is laid
Forward to the light
Our souls live forever
Still fight for life
Pain and misery we’ve seen
See the path to relief
Run away from the past
Eternal pain
Never escapes
Keep running
This is final
Final release
Final escape

you must be phatman <_<
Link

ELITE

Dhampy posted on Jun 16, 2008 10:33:36 PM - Report post

quote:

originally posted by Serivor

An endless void of despair
I thought I would forever drift endlessly
Then I gazed into your eyes
I knew then where my destiny lies
For your beauty shall hold me till the end of time
Entranced by you I felt the world melt away and then we were all but one
Then as I dared to close my eyes
I saw that you were gone
Then the shadows swept upon me
The world was so dark with out your light *without is one word
Were you but a dream....?
--->I cant find you try all I might<----- * this whole sentence
Il never give in * you forgot the i
there will be no end to my fight

It's poetry, not prose.

In the end they will lay their freedom at our feet and say to us, 'Make us your slaves, but feed us.'

List of CHU'ers on deviantART--SUPPORT YOUR LOCAL DEVIANTS!

/--\
[SG]